Insinmind: Afternoon Solipsism

Critique and authors thoughts on it
Insinmind is a novel filled with a lot of fascinating world building and ideas full of imagination about how the struggle of living in a snarl full of chaos and the results how carnal the mind and sin can affect everything, as the author intended to make it different from most other novels, however the catch behind him trying to make it so different lead to being too off the rails with how things were handled making the plot extremely hard to follow with so much going on. Because of that the novel is set be Allens benchmark in not crossing it's line of trying to cram and make a story/plot so different to make it more coherent that before.

Postives

 * Anti Gary Stu and Mary Sue protagonists: From the start of Chapter 1 while Zeths success rate is cut short when he gets his butt whooped by Caprin, and Lincent who was successful in fighting Drofred at first on Chapter 3 gets defeated as well.
 * Development:
 * Doesn't drag: There is little to no down time with what happens next, nor is there even slices of life, it's get to next event with hardly any hesitation with it's pacing.


 * Entertainment Value:
 * Unique Art:
 * Variety:
 * World building and lore

Negatives

 * Bloated, overly confusing and lacking contextual rushed pacing Plot
 * Cheap Art:
 * Dialogue:


 * Non linear narrative:
 * Poorly done grammar and descriptive reading:
 * Powerscaling: Like Heir to the Stars, Afternoon Solipsism writes Chapter 7 and 9 of Caprin vs David in a way as if the writer was making a powerscaling statistic wikia profile to a character rather than a literary descriptive and artistic read, making it not reader friendly.